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    Laurin runs Between the Lines Critiques, providing professional critiques of manuscripts and synopses for a very reasonable fee. For more information on this service please see the Between the Lines Critiques page.
  • What Between the Lines clients are saying…

    “Laurin Wittig has a phenomenal gift for identifying the problems in a story and, more importantly, suggesting ways to fix them. I can’t imagine trying to write a book without her!”
    Pamela Palmer
    Award-winning author of the Esri series from Sihouette Nocturne and the Feral Warriors series from Avon.

    “Laurin Wittig’s talent for finding the essence of a scene and pointing it in a logical and more focused direction is unmatched. Laurin’s guidance is kind and to the point. More importantly she MOTIVATES!”
    Elizabeth Holcombe
    Author of Heaven and the Heather from Berkley/Jove

    “Laurin Wittig is the sharpest story surgeon you could ever desire. She peels away the unnecessary layers to find the strong bones of your plot and character. Laurin has discerned things about my characters that I was still waiting to discover, and I find her insights stunning.”
    Anne Shaw Moran
    The Marlene Award Finalist

    “Laurin Wittig is a genius. Her insightful comments and suggestions helped me change a good manuscript into a great manuscript. I plan to use her critique service for all my future novels. She's the writing/critique partner that we all secretly hope to find -- someone who will help your book become the best it can be, without any power struggles, jealousy or secret agendas.”
    Beverly Giroux
    Golden Heart Contest Finalist

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Lie to me!

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 29, 2009

tvI love it when I find a good, writing related reason to watch TV.  Don’t you?  Last night, at the end of my guilty pleasure, American Idol, I caught an episode of a new TV show, Lie to Me. 

Now, after one episode I’m not prepared to say whether this show will stick around, but what caught my attention was the hook — the main group of characters are human lie detectors.   They read body language, and here’s the cool part for writers, they show you what they are looking at, then show you more examples. 

My muses perked up immediately and started looking for body language to use with the gang of characters in my current wip.  I’ll be Tivo-ing this series just to learn the body language tips.    You can catch up on already aired episodes and test your own ability to see a lie (and lots of non-lie emotions, too) at: Lie to Me.  Check it out and see if you don’t find a subtle layer to add to your characterizations.

Now get writing!

Laurin

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Romantic Inks Auction Under Way!

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 21, 2009

We interrupt your daily writing for this important public service announcement…okay, you are reading this, so I’m really interrupting your blog surfing.  Read on, then get back to that writing!

The Romantic Inks charity auction is under way.  Head on over to the Gamble On Love auction page and find something fun — a critique from yours truly as well as other authors and agents, books, books, and more books, a tarot card reading, drawings, photographs… and more! 

It’s for a good cause and bidding ends January 26th, so don’t wait!

Now, get back to your writing… okay, you can go to the auction first, but then get back to your writing. :-)

Laurin

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Golden Heart Contest?

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 19, 2009

If you have entered the 2009 Golden Heart Contest sponsored by Romance Writers of America you know how many $$ you had to shell out.  There are a group of us who finaled in the GH in 1999 who sponsor The Jeannie Gray Golden Friendship Award to help defray the cost of entry.

The cool thing is that the contest for this award is completely free.  FREE!  And the prize is $100 to help defray the contest expenses plus a beautiful certificate — oh, and the prayers and wishes of a very powerful circle of women, cheering your manuscript on in the contest.   All you have to do to enter is write a short essay (250-300 words) and email it to the contest coordinator. Deadline for submission of the essay is Midnight EST, February 1st, 2009. 

Again, this is FREE.

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Interested?  Of course you are.  Check out all the Jeannie Gray Golden Friendship Award details, including the essay topic, here. 

Don’t know what the Golden Heart Contest is?

Okay, if you belong to Romance Writers of America you know what the Golden Heart Contest is, but just in case you’ve read this far hoping for some explanation here’s the quickie description.  The GH, as it’s frequently called, is the premier contest in the Romance community for unpublished authors.  Preliminary rounds are peer or published author judged.  Finalists are judged by acquiring editors.  Yes, you read that right.  Acquiring editors!

I personally know at least two people who sold their first books because they finaled in this contest and their manuscripts ended up on the desk of an editor who loved them.  Don’t believe me?  Barbara Dunlop and Pamela Palmer.  I’m sure I know more, but the brain doesn’t hold information the way it used to.  I myself finaled in the GH in 1999, and again in 2000, though the first book I sold was not the finaling manuscript.  Go figure.

Laurin

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Charity Auction ~ Great Stuff for Writers!

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 18, 2009

The lovely Gemma Halliday, who I don’t know personally, but know of through professional circles, is doing a wonderful thing.  She’s hosting a charity auction to help out a homeless teen and her mom.  The story is here.   I’m offering a critique of 25 manuscript pages ~ it’s a great way to get a Between the Lines Critique and help Katy and her mom get a home again.  There are lots of other great items for writers to bid on as well.

Click on the graphic below and you’ll go to the auction site.  Now, go do something good for your writing and for Katy and her mom!

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Got Scene Goals?

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 8, 2009

Goal DefinitionYesterday I talked about character goals and how they drive both your characters and your plot.  Today, let’s talk scene goals.

My all time favorite how-to write book is one I find very few people are familiar with — Scene & Structure (Elements of Fiction Writing), byJack Bickham.  Mr. Bickham, a protege of Dwight Swain, has the talent to take Swain’s great lessons — which I’ve never been able to slog through — and present them in simple and concise ways for people like me who find non-fiction tedious, even when the topic is something I’m passionate about.

So here, in a nutshell, okay, a blog post, is one of the most important things I have ever learned about crafting a scene, which I learned from that book.

Every scene must have a goal.

Simple, right?  Think about it, though.  Every scene must have a goal.  What exactly does that mean?  The writer might have a goal to move the characters through the doorway and on their next stage of a journey.   Big deal. 

However if you take the point of view character in the scene and determine what he wants — referencing Tolkien here of course — Frodo wants to get away from the lake that is giving him the willies and get through the gate into Moria in order to get on with his journey to destroy that darn ring.  Now we have a goal worth reading to see how it turns out.

But what happens if they arrive at the doorway, Gandalf says a magic word, the gate opens and there’s no more worrying about the willies produced by the lake?  Your reader yawns, puts the book down and goes to sleep.

Every scene must have a goal…
and a disaster.

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Consider what happens if, instead of success in reaching Frodo’s goal, there is a disaster?  Now Frodo’s got trouble on his hands (and a weird lake at his back).

What do I mean by disaster?  Bickham says there are three possible disastrous outcomes for a scene goal:

Yes, but…
No.
No, and furthermore…

Taking up Frodo again, a “yes, but” disaster would be: Yes, they get through the door, but something follows them through (which actually  happens in the form of Gollum but that isn’t revealed right away so it doesn’t really rank as a disaster for this scene).  Or yes, they get through the door, but there’s a new challenge on the other side (which also happens, but is a separate scene, so that’s another goal/disaster combo, and doesn’t really work for this scene).

A “no.” disaster would be simply, No, they don’t get through the door.  Trouble of an indeterminate sort… though there is that creepy lake they are sitting beside.

A “no, and furthermore disaster”, which are my personal favorites, would be no, they don’t get through the door, and furthermore they are attacked by a monster from the lake.

Tolkien does let them through the door, but not without some long moments of will they/won’t they figure out the password, so it looks like a no, and furthermore there’s something in the lake to be concerned about disaster.  Ultimately it turns out to be a Yes, but disaster, because they do get the door open, but the lake monster grabs Frodo at the same moment.  Personally I was glued to the page, rooting for Frodo to escape during the end of that scene.

Set Goals Blackboard

Do you know what your pov character’s goal is in every scene?  It doesn’t have to be stated explicitly on the page, but you the writer needs to know what it is, so you know where you are going in the scene.  Possibly more importantly, the reader needs to know what’s at stake for the pov character in every scene.  She might not be able to say what it is, but if you were to ask a reader what she was worried about in a scene, or what is it that she had to find out that kept her turning the pages, she’d tell you what the scene goal was.

So get to it.  Figure out that scene goal.  And if the current pov character has a wimpy scene goal, see if there’s another character with a more interesting goal and try the scene from her pov.  Then drop that disaster on her head.  You’ll have a page turning scene (which is reader speak for great pacing) on your hands.

Laurin

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Got Character Goals?

Posted by Laurin Wittig on January 7, 2009

Goal DefinitionIt’s a new year and every blog I go to is talking about goals or resolutions and yes, I am, too, but bear with me as this post applies to the craft of writing, not your personal goals. 

Goals as craft, you ask?  Yes, I say.  Two ways goals are used when crafting your story come to mind immediately, though I’m sure there are more.   Let’s tackle the first today.

There is the quintessential GMC of Deb Dixon fame.  Goal, Motivation & Conflict.  The big three of character creation.  I’m leaving a discussion of the merits of motivation and conflict for another day because today’s goal is,  well, goals. 

Every character needs a goal, two in fact, one internal (emotional) and one external (action).  I think of them as needs and wants, respectively, as in what does the character need in order to be happy/whole/sane/etc. and what does the character think she wants right now.  (Feel free to substitute “he” for every “she” if that fits your story better.)

Without a goal your character has nothing to learn in your story (that’s from the internal goal) and nothing to do (that’s from the external goal).  Goal’s can be big or small — though when talking characters, bigger is usually more compelling. 

Goals drive your plot. 

Did you get that?  What your character needs and wants drives what happens in the story — aka, your plot.  If your character needs to learn to trust in order to be happy again (an internal goal), then your story better put that character in positions where she has to learn how to trust, and that trust must be tested, hard, so the character learns the lesson deep in her bones.  And if what the character wants (that external goal) is at odds with what she needs (wants to be a hermit so she never has to trust anyone again) you’ve got serious internal conflict to make the reader turn the page… but I’m getting ahead of myself here.   I’ll save conflict for another day.

Set Goals Blackboard

So, in the spirit of the New Year and the annual frenzy of resolutions and goal setting, do you know what your current protagonist’s goals are?  What about your villain?  If you are writing a romance or anything that has a romance in it, you need to know both the hero’s and the heroine’s goals.  See if you can write them down, one sentence per goal:

My character needs…

My character wants…

If you can’t hone it down to one simple, clear, statement per goal I’m betting you don’t have a good handle on that character yet, and you very well may have a muddy plot.   So get to work and make your characters set some goals.  it’s a great way to start a new year!

Tune in tomorrow for my other craft related goal.  This one is all about pacing.

Happy New Year!

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